Friday, September 04, 2009

Ode to the Romantics

Falling in love was once easy and cheap,
But all you taught me was how to weep.
And now there's a price to pay,
And now there are words you must say.

Yet each to our true we sin,
Of empty hearts we carelessly win.
But your love is the dust of an old book,
And I a thief, who took to took.

If only you let meaning meet with reason,
Your smile could save this season.
But you sit in that room of despair,
With shawls of sadness that you choose to wear.

What glory is now to be craved,
And what misery is now to be saved?
In one moment you could so easily care,
And in another, you wouldn't dare.

You may have played with the moon,
And slept till every noon.
But one June, someday soon,
You will know what it's like to croon.

But I'm a poet, so I suffer,
But each thought of you makes it tougher.
And it isn't that you know no joy,
For you I'll still be a glass toy.

19 Comments:

Anonymous Anonymous said...

Of all your writing, this is the cutest and the sweetest. Anamika

2:05 AM, September 05, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

I couldn buy it completely.din't sound very 'you'.however I do stand mildly disapponted for other reasons.as a writer perhaps you should write more of this from time to time.It dint quite strike a chord, though I know it ail linger.the last line btw saved it from drowining.-M

12:19 PM, September 05, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

and the first few lines...it sounds okay but there's something missing.I mean, I know it cud have been way better.

12:25 PM, September 05, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

-M

12:26 PM, September 05, 2009  
Blogger J said...

Thanks Anamika. :)

M: Haha. You're right, something's off. I guess my rhymes sound silly. Why ,mildly disappointed for other reasons?

12:36 PM, September 06, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

well, I don't know much about poetry but this seems like you're trying a little too hard to free fall
You wrote it in haste.dint you?
Also, because I know this isn't the best ode to the romantics you can come up with.
Have you read 'alchemy of desire' by T.Tejpal?
it's like you're engaged in the begining, by the idea of this guy writing about something you wpulsn really expect him to be writing about.it hooks u with it's originality and slowly it turns ordinary and close to vague and then you're tempted to put it downbut you don't only out of curiousity and because you've come far enough. The ending by then spent really matter.you're jerry man, you could cut with words, could play or even perhaps shake a oil rush with it, this clearly iant your forte so maybe you ought to be a little more sincere here.
Ps. I'm really sorry if this comes across as rude.
-M

3:57 PM, September 06, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

*I meant shake a lil tush. Not oil rush.

3:59 PM, September 06, 2009  
Blogger J said...

Shake a little tush? Haha. Now if only all writers knew that. Ya, well, I think I did rush it up. I think I was just having a little fun. And no, you weren't rude. And yes, I'll work on my sincerity. Cheers :)

1:03 PM, September 07, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

you just can't answer straight. Can you?
-M

10:19 PM, September 07, 2009  
Blogger J said...

My profession doesn't allow it. :)

1:56 AM, September 08, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Why not?educate me.
-M

8:10 PM, September 08, 2009  
Blogger J said...

It's something to do with the Murphy's Law. :)

11:23 AM, September 10, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

okay then don't ever try educating! :p
So if I asked for your number, chances are I won't get a ten digit number.
Is it?
-M

9:11 PM, September 12, 2009  
Blogger J said...

So wait you're asking me for my number or is it just one of those rhetorical blogger prove-my-point-right questions?

11:12 PM, September 13, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

depends on how you answer it and by now somehow I find myself hoping you're close to being handsome.
Anyway...
So what ail it be?
-M

7:06 PM, September 15, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

well,I'm asking for your number.
-M

8:40 PM, September 15, 2009  
Blogger J said...

So what happens if I turn out to be a gap-toothed ogre look-alike? Don't answer that. Maybe you could figure it out through other ways? How about leaving me a mysterious email id to send the number? This is, after all, an anonymous blog.

3:47 PM, September 16, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

So now I go and create a bloody email I'd just so...
Sigh
Bull.
Okay.
At it.

6:11 PM, September 16, 2009  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

mforblog@yahoo.in

6:16 PM, September 16, 2009  

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